问题：

写成了记叙文

缺少过渡词，句式单一。

开头和结尾，格式，套话。

书写问题。

这个人是一个还是一个群体。

父母、老师、医生、科学家 （两者兼而有之）

几个原因，条理性（1、2）

语法：时态、过去式

用词、副词

句式（定语从句、Not only... but also...：不仅……而且、so +形容词/副词 + that 句子：如此……以致）

参考范文1

应用文写作
One possible version：
Boys and girls, I am Li Hua, a student from Class 5. It is such a great honor for me to address a speech here with a title of "The person I respect and admire".
We have a lot of respectable people around us.They may be our teachers, parents or one of our elders. As for me, my father is the person I respect most. My father is a teacher who loves his work and his students very much. He not only works very hard every day but he will also spare some time to accompany me and share many funny things with me about his work.
When I come acrossthe problems of learning in my study, my father will listen to me patiently and encourage me to overcome the difficulties bravely. He has achieved a lot in his work and is respected by his students.
So, in my mind my father is the person I respect most and I love him deeply.

That's all. Thank you for your listening.

参考范文2 There are many respectable people around us. And the person I respect most is my physics teacher. She is of medium height, with long and blonde hair. She is so patient with each student that we all like her. It is her friendliness and the sense of responsibility that make me admire her. When I failed the exam last month and was in low spirits, she patted me gently on the shoulder and gave me great encouragement. She teaches us not only to gain knowledge but also how to be a good person. Having set a great example to us students, she fully deserves my respect.

参考范文3

For me, the most respectable person round me is my best friend, Li Hua, a 17-year-old teenager currently studying in my class, who is crazy about reading, learning and helping other people.There is no doubt that there are many things that I can learn from him. First and foremost, needless to say, he is good at English, for he has lived in Detroit for half a year as an exchange student. Additionally, no one can deny he gets along well with all our classmates, enjoy a harmonious interpersonal relationship and is always ready to help others. Last but certainly not least, he has a lot of life experience, considering that he has been serving as vice monitor for many years. Hopefully, I could become an outstanding person like Li Hua. I have the confidence that, with such an excellent friend around me, I will become better and better.