读写任务议论文写作高分技巧

七、实例分析

阅读下面短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

The generation gap between students and their teachers is becoming more significant with only 3. 3 per cent out of a survey group of 1, 000 students from 30 key middle schools in the city saying they would be willing to tell their teachers of their inner thoughts.

In today’s educational environment, teachers are positioned to be the authority figure for learning instead of also becoming a good friend in the lives of students.

As only students with good marks in exams are considered the “apples in the eyes” of the teachers, most students think their teachers to be partial（偏心）.

“I feel sad to hear such remarks,” said Yu Yi, a well-known special-class teacher.

She recalled that in the past, teachers and students would play basketball together or comment on novels while sitting on the grass during a break. But today, study and good marks are the only topics of conversation between students and teachers.

“Schools are not only the place where knowledge is imparted （传授） but also where students are taught how to be an upright person,” Yu said. “The success of a person is not merely determined by intelligence but also by emotional state.”

Yang Xiong, director of the Juvenile Research Institute, said the educational system which focuses on examinations should be held to be substantially responsible.

[写作内容]

1. 以约30个词概括学生不愿告诉老师内心想法的原因；

2. 然后以约120个词就“现代师生关系”这个主题发表你的看法，并包括如下要点：

（1）你是否愿意告诉老师你内心的想法？为什么？

（2）你希望你与你的老师之间的关系是怎样的？如何才能建立这种关系？

[写作要求]

（1）可以使用实例或其它论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

（2）标题自定；

（3）文中不能出现考生真实姓名和学校名称

[评分标准]

概括准确、语言规范、内容合适、篇章连贯。

套用写作模板进行写作：

1. 拟出标题：Love and Concern Make Ideal Relationship

2. 进行概括：Students are becoming unwilling to confess to their teachers because they are not equal in position and teachers lay too much emphasis on the academic performances of the students.

3. 自然过渡。回答“你是否愿意告诉老师你内心的想法”，给出观点（愿意或不愿意），直截了当，一语概之。如“我愿意告诉老师我的内心想法”。While some students might have doubts, I am willing to share my inner thoughts with my teachers.

4. 列举例证。回答“为什么”， 给出一两个理由。They show love and concern for their students and they are also good listeners. I always find it easy to seek support and advice from them, from which I benefit and learn a lot.

5. 回答“你希望你与你的老师之间的关系是怎样的”，可以是“重要的， 和谐的， 朋友式的”等等。In this case, an ideal relationship between teachers and students is very important. In my opinion, this relationship should be one filled with love, care and understanding, in which teachers and students show respect for each other and exchange ideas freely.

6. 回答“如何才能建立这种关系”，即师生双方应该如何做。To build a relationship of this kind, teachers should become friends of students while students ought to place more trust in their teachers and give voice to their feelings frankly.

7. 总结。如可说“只有这样，我们才能拥有和谐的师生关系。”Only in this way can we enjoy a warm relationship between teachers and students.