2016各地模拟试题书面表达押题集萃

12.【云南省玉溪市一中学2016届高三下学期第一次月考】假如你是李华，最近你所居住的城市（北京）的雾霾严重影响了人们的生活。请根据写作要点给报社写一篇稿件反映这一问题。

写作要点：1. 雾霾带来的危害。

2. 你的建议。

注意：词数100左右。    参考词汇:雾霾  smog

【答案】

As we all know, smog has always been a serious problem in Beijing, which has done great harm to our daily life. Recently it has become more and more serious. The heavy smog has caused many traffic accidents, which has brought great sadness to the families. In the street, you can see many people wear masks. But unluckily, many old people and babies can’t escape suffering from illness caused by smog.

Therefore, it is very urgent for us to take measures to reduce the smog. It is very vital to educate people, especially factory owners to raise awareness of protecting the environment. Moreover, people should go to work by bus or bike instead of driving every day. And media should call on citizens to work together to do something to save the air that we can’t live without.

【解析】

试题分析：考查开放性作文。要求以李华的身份给你报社写文章反映北京的雾霾严重影响人们的生活的问题。所以文章要使用一般现 在时，同时第一称和第三人称交替使用。本文对学生的要求很高，文章的要点都没有给出，只给了一个提纲，要求考生根据实际情况自行组织要点。建议要点如下：1.提出问题：最近越来越严重的雾霾已经成为北京市一个严重的问题。2.雾霾的危害：影响日常生活；导致交通事故，给家人带来悲伤；很多人因为雾霾患上了呼吸道疾病；3.个人建议：立刻采取措施减少雾霾；最重要的教育人们导致雾霾的主要原因，人们应该绿色出行，所有的媒体应该呼吁大家一起努力减少空气污染。建议文章分成两段，第一段提出问题并叙述雾霾的危害。第二段提出个人治理雾霾的建议。写作时注意谋篇布局，所给要点要接地气，建议要实用有效。

【名师点睛】

本篇范文很好地进行了语篇设计，全文分成两段显得很有条理；各要点的叙述井井有条，层次分明。第二段所列出解决雾霾的方法实用有效很接地气。作者在文章中多次实用了定语从句，如As we all know, ...., which has done....；...., which has brought ....；同时句中的高级词汇使用合理，作者没有堆砌辞藻。如be vital to...对...重要等；范文中语言地道，并没有出现中国式英语的句型。另外文章中的连接词运用较好，如第二段中therefore，moreover等等。

考点：考查开放性作文

13.【重庆市育才中学2016届高三下学期第一次月考】假定你是李华，你在上周日搭坐102号公交车，该公交车司机的不文明行为让乘客很愤怒。于是你向公交车公司写一封投诉信。要点如下：

1. 司机的不文明行为（大声讲话、紧急刹车、态度粗鲁等）。

2. 希望尽快查清此事。

注意：1. 词数100左右。2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

【答案】

Dear Sir,

I am Li Hua. I am writing to complain about one of your bus-drivers’ improper and rude behaviors.

Last Sunday, I was taking the No. 102 bus whose driver not only kept on talking with a man loudly but also drove very fast. So some passengers advised him to concentrate on driving, but he didn’t pay any attention. What’s worse, he drove even faster. Then another passenger couldn’t bear it, asking the driver to keep the passengers’ safety in mind. But the driver stopped the bus so suddenly that all the  passengers nearly lost their balance. However, he didn’t apologize but said rudely “It’s none of your business.”

I sincerely hope you can investigate this incident and proper measures should be taken to prevent such an incident happening again.

Sincerely yours,

Li Hua

【名师点睛】

本篇范文很好地完成了题目所有要求，涵盖了要求的所有要点，同时篇章结构合理。文章的亮点在于高级句式的使用，如定语从句I was taking the No. 102 bus whose driver not only kept on talking with a man loudly but also drove very fast.分词做状语用法：Then another passenger couldn’t bear it, asking the driver to keep the passengers’ safety in mind.同时文章中的高级短语使用也比较多，如take some measures to do sth采取措施做某事；none of your business和你无关；在阐述司机的粗鲁行为时，串联成分使用也很多，如what's more等。

考点：考查应用文写作

14.【河北省正定中学2016届高三上学期期末考试】请你根据以下信息提示 ，介绍一款时尚手机。

1. 作为高科技产品；这款手机在国内外被广泛地使用。

2. 主要功能：通话、发短信、上网、照相、玩游戏等。

3. 体积小，重量轻易携带，适用于各年龄段人群。

注意：词数100词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。

Being a product of high technology,_______

【答案】

Being a product of high technology, the mobile phones are being more and more widely used. They are perhaps the most popular means of communication all over the world today.  They are small in size, light in weight and easy to carry, offering fast and convenient services for communication.

The users can use them for calling, sending short messages and Internet-surfing. Besides, they can be used to take photos and when you are free, you can also enjoy exciting games. So this mobile phone is suitable for people of  all ages.

In all, it is the best product of the year.

【解析】

试题分析：请你根据以下信息提示 ，介绍一款时尚手机。1.作为高科技产品；这款手机在国内外被广泛地使用。2.主要功能：通话、发短信、上网、照相、玩游戏等。3.体积小，重量轻易携带，适用于各年龄段人群。

写作时不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯同时要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。注意：词数100词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。

【亮点说明】Being a product of high technology, the mobile phones are being more and more widely used.现在分词作状语，句中并运用现在进行时态的被动语态； They are small in size, light in weight and easy to carry, offering fast and convenient services for communication. 现在分词作结果状语；Besides, they can be used to take photos and when you are free, you can also enjoy exciting games.时间状语从句和含情态动词的被动语态完美结合；另外，Besides, In all,的使用为文章增色添彩。

考点：考查话题类作文